Life
Is one big goosebump
Is one big ride
An active volcano
Boiling sensitivity
Feelings
That tinkles the skin
Slip ice cubes on bones
Of will and of longing
Of wanting to be
Of being to want
And reaching
Stomach eccentricity
Its upper part screams
In silence
Yet screams indeed
Higher than throats
Louder than amplifiers
It has its own amplifier
Rocking inside me
With mosh pits of tension
And leads of anxiety
Oh well, life
Is one big goosebump
Is one big ride
If one lives for real
If one does not hide
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12 comments:
Very good... enjoyed this little ride.
Nicely written. Thanks.
Thank Rob! It's great to see you here!
Hi paul! Thanks a lot! It was fun to write!
I made one small alteration. The last line was “If one lives intensely” and I changed it to “If one does not hide”, I thought it sounded a lot better, and living life intensely can have many different meanings which were kind of bugging me.
I really enjoyed this...and it was all so true!
"Slip ice cubes on bones
Of will and of longing"
Amazing phrase..
I like "mosh pits of tension" I haven't been in a mosh pit, but seeing them on TV makes me feel tension! It's a great image, especially in the context of the rest of your poem.
Hi fledgling poet! Thanks a lot! I was trying to express myself in this excellent theme, because I have strong feelings about it.
Hi gautami! Thank you so much! A verse about those chilly bone feelings we all know so well.
Hello raymond pert! Thank you so much! I really wanted to share this poem! Oh, and I did use to mosh pit, but now I prefer the comfort of my living room. See ya around!
Hi Jennifer! Those dreams can be pretty goosebumpy! Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed the poem. Yes, and most of the times we really can’t hide.
Hi Gilson,
Wonderful haiku. It's very hard to write a good haiku, even more such a wonderful one like yours. I really enjoyed it. :)
Great read. I really enjoyed "Of wanting to be, Of being to want." Excellent.
Hi joezul! I wasn’t thinking of it as a haiku, but it certainly is challenging to squeeze in a lot of meaning a small number of words. I hope to start writing haiku soon, it’s just because I don’t have this habit. Thanks a lot for stopping by!
Hi patois! Thanks! It appears like one thing does come with the other!
Hi Gilson! Your words come right from the heart, the soul! I love this poem, and especially the lines "Oh well, life/ is one big goosebump/ is one big ride/ if one lives for real/ if one does not hide". This says so much to me about life, about living, about being completely in the present moment, about not being held back by fear, about embracing every experience with an open heart/arms/mind/spirit/. Gilson, you are not only an incredible painter -- you are also an incredible poet!!
:)
Hi Clare! Thank you very very much! Your description is very faithful to what I felt when I wrote this poem. And to be able to share this feeling makes it even more special, thanks again!
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